Wednesday, November 10, 2010

Legacy



Clumsy hands moving up and down
Haunted fingertips infinitely counting
For every pearl a tear dropped
For every tear a pearl counted

Memories attached
Feelings concealed
Plenty to reveal

Symbol of purity and renovation
A continuous prompt to be sincere
An urge to remain dignified
A push to keep searching for happiness

The perfect gift she has ever received
From the one she will always grieve


 
© Gabriela Abalo


Written for Magpie Tales – #40 and One Shot Wednesday

32 comments:

GYPSYWOMAN said...

just so beautiful! - a piece to which we can all relate - your words here as softly beautiful as that string of pearls - and i, too, have that string of pearls -

annell said...

I liked what you wrote, but it was a little sad at the end. You touched me.

Kay L. Davies said...

Poignant and stirring.
-- K

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willow said...

Lovely and so sad. Well done.

dustus said...

Your piece reminds me of how creations (objects) carry special significance to the beholder, especially in times when deep emotion is conveyed. The tone to me has an effective element of detachment in recognition of grief, which works well.

Myrna R. said...

We all grieve differently and different things bring it on. This was lovely though sad.

Carrie Burtt said...

This is a sad yet powerful poem Gabriela...your experience and pain brings strength to your writing and message...this is beautiful! :-)

Steve said...

Sad stuff, well rendered.

Eric Alder said...

The gift that keeps on giving.

Nice One Shot, Gabriela!



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Brian Miller said...

what beautiful sorrow you have risen with your words...

Wine and Words said...

Gabi, your love and light always comes through in your writing :)

Helen said...

Your Magpie is a reminder of the lovely gifts I've received from people I treasure ~~ how much I miss them today.

Nicely written ..........

Kristen Haskell said...

beautiful job! I always enjoy your writing :)

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

very sad...counting pearls like a rosary

Everyday Goddess said...

such sadness told in such a beautiful way.

She said...

lovely and sorrowful. great one shot!

Luis Gomez said...

Beautiful Gabriela.

Suz said...

This was beautifully sad
but not sad..but filled with the love of rememberance

Steve said...

Pearl and Tears what wonderful imagery. Thanks Gabbi

Lyn said...

The beauty and the saddness..hand in hand..good writing..

OJ Gonzalez-Cazares said...

I couldn't help thinking of my "abuelita" praying the rosary (sigh)... great write!

ds said...

Such a beautiful, piquant poem. Thank you.

Rashmi said...

Beautiful poem.....

signed...bkm said...

each pearl a tear counted - memories of a gift, a symbol of love...nice magpie...bkm

Tumblewords: said...

Stunning!

Reflections said...

Poignant heartache of a love lost, spun threadlike through tears and pearls.

Shashi said...

Dear Gabriela

Beautiful ode to your mother(Well I am guessing that she is the one you will forever grieve.
I liked the way you have picturised that and your words touched me a lot... like

Memories attached
Feelings concealed
Plenty to reveal

Thanks for sharing...

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Jingle said...

Clumsy hands moving up and down
Haunted fingertips infinitely counting
For every pearl a tear dropped
For every tear a pearl counted

love your opening,
sad story, lovely writing.

Kass said...

It's nice to have objects that hold memories and stir us to strive for meaning.

I enjoyed your Magpie.

Kirk Jusko said...

Quite a legacy at that.

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

love can be so heartbreaking sometimes, what a lovely poem.

Caty said...

this was captivating and beautiful