Thursday, September 16, 2010

Father Time




Tell me; oh tell me my dear
What I want to hear!
Come, come near
Can you see my tear?

Whispers in my ear
Things I don’t want to hear
Truths I fear
Matters that aren’t clear

Stop, stop… please don’t disappear
I will try to be sincere
So please reappear
and tell me all about yesteryear

Why are you too severe?
I’m not acting weird!
I’m full of revere
And not at all insincere

I know you will persevere
Until I’m convinced there isn’t any frontier
Tell me; oh tell me my dear
What I don’t want to hear!
But don’t jeer

I did hear what I fear
I did clear my tear
You have been sincere
but please disappear…


© Gabriela Abalo

Written for Magpie Tales – #32

31 comments:

gautami tripathy said...

You depicted the relationship so well. The yearning and the rejection...

timeless flies search for fries

Arian Tejano said...

the final line gave my sense a slap. wow, unexpected twist

Priyanka Bhowmick said...

very well written and the rhymings r just perfect

ninotaziz said...

Tell me; oh tell me my dear
What I don’t want to hear!
But don’t jeer

Push pull tug release want wont

Well done, Gabi.

senderupwords said...

Nice write here Gabi... For me hits close to home. Love and Light, Sender

Jingle said...

inviting words,
your tale makes one feel calm and embraced.

kathew said...

Brava Gabi-

ninotaziz said...

Dear Gabi,

I so envy you that you have been to Borobodur. I have not been - so close, yet so far. Now that the girls are bigger, perhaps I will be able to steal a few days alone to bask in its splendour.

Abhilasha-The Desire said...

Loved your closing line.. I so would have felt the same...
Very nice poem... sad yet strong !!

Claudia said...

the things we want to hear and don't want to hear - very well written!

Tag said...

Well done Gabi. I invite you and your fellow writers to join the community at:

http://hellopoetry.com/home/

a friendly place to gain exposure and exchange with other poets.

JeffScape said...

Father time? Or memory? ;)

Stafford Ray said...

So like a woman! Plead for understanding and when it arrives, you don't want it!
Mmmm.. I guess you won't want this bit of understanding either so I will go now.

Tumblewords: said...

Well done, it is clear!

signed...bkm said...

yes, i do understand this...listen but please disappear...it is good to be a woman...bkm

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

Sometimes we'd rather the Mirror, Mirror on the wall to lie to us..

Rene

Meri said...

Interesting take on "reveal."

Nanka said...

Beautiful poem and the fears of a woman very clear. But alas!! was punished for sincerely revealing in the last stanza.

Kris said...

Længe leve revolutionen!

rel said...

A fun description of that which we all think/worry about too much; je pense!
rel

Kristen Haskell said...

Oh what it takes to get to the point where we just want them to disappear. Great job!

kathi harris said...

I agree, smtimes people do say things that u don't want 2 hear & u do wish they wd just go away.

Annie said...

A humorous twist at the end. Truth hurts. Reality bites. We know we need it but can't wait to get rid of it.

Ed Pilolla said...

lots of fun, and with some deep thoughts. really well done.

Brian Miller said...

your last line says so much gabi...and i wonder did they think how it ever got to this point...nice magpie!

Kirk Jusko said...

Reads like something Dorothy Parker might have come up with. Very good.

C.M. Jackson said...

yes! great magpie!

Lydia said...

A stunning job of rhyming!

RA said...

Brilliant! You had the same "tune" as John Cooper Clarke.... I love it! :)

Deborah said...

Very good Magpie!

Carrie Burtt said...

Gabriela i love what you did with your poem for Magpie...awesome writing! :-)