Thursday, September 9, 2010

Promise




I stare at you from afar,
Like a thief I hide and survey
I wonder how happy you truly are
I muse how devoted you really are
I ponder how you can live like that...

Without a thought I walked away from my hiding place
No longer aware that I may be seen
I get closer to the window that is keeping you away
Looking through and devouring your image
Hating the disguising clothes hiding your exquisite figure

With rebel tears running through my face
I hold my urge to call your name
I’m no longer begging, imploring or pleading
I’m done with all that!

I’m going away
Leaving you in my past
and by no means, coming back

But then again I know I should return
To steal a glance every Thursday at noon
when you are by the window praying to your God
while sending your forbidden love to me

You kept your promise
But I can’t keep mine
The pain and loneliness is unbearable
knowing that we will never be together

You chose your God
I just choose my freedom…



© Gabriela Abalo


Written for Magpie Tales – #31

37 comments:

Lyn said...

To be so much in love, it hurts but, freedom's the right choice...to try to know the other..what a very good poem!!

Tag said...

This is haunting. One I will revisit time and again.

Everyday Goddess said...

to be shut off from earthly love is not a situation that i can envision for myself.

cosmoscami said...

A well-writen, passionate, personal(?) poem.
I loved its tenderness.

Marilyn said...

Very well written, I am far from anti religion but I am against extremes.

Jingle said...

struggle to be free,
that's true in reality.
lovely tale!

kathew said...

love lost and discarded-how sad for the person standing outside.

Kristen Haskell said...

Wonderful poem I finished it saying WOW.

Julie said...

Maybe the person through the window just chose their own view of freedom, too. And their own view of love.

You write in English very well.

Kay said...

read it twice, could read it a million more...

perfectly complex and imaginably real emotion evoking a strong contemplation...

that is very thought provoking.

All-in-all, I love this! one more read before i go... :)

also, reminds of a quote i heard earlier today (paraphrase) "You've reached your first fill of youth, you've come back, unfulfilled yet want to come back for more"

CM said...

So intriguing...your words are still tumbling around in my mind. I'm curious as to the rest of the tale...but maybe that was the intention. Wonderfully written.

Tumblewords: said...

Well done, well done! A fine Magpie - deep and provocative.

Susannah said...

Nice writing!

Abhilasha-The Desire said...

Amazing poem.. very sad.. a love unrequited pains more than a failed one...

Deborah said...

Oooh ... very good!

sukipoet said...

well said. the lovers chose not each other, but their own paths and thus must part, or communicate through the glass.

Stafford Ray said...

Sensitive and insightful. Tragic that some of us must choose between love and God when if asked, the Godly will assert that "God is love".
A generation ago, I faced just such a dilemma and chose freedom too but at great cost and a lingering feeling of injustice done.

senderupwords said...

This is a super thought provoking piece. Nice Magpie, Bisous, Love and Light, Sender

Brian Miller said...

having to come to grips with the choices of others can be so hard...and makes you wonder if they weighed your sacrifice along with theirs...nice mag!

Carrie Burtt said...

Gabriela this is heartfelt and beautiful...a wonderful magpie!
:-)

Pauline said...

powerful words!

standing on my head said...

a riveting photo, and mesmerizing poem. i'll come back to this one.

Lydia said...

Oh, a passionate Magpie! I live four miles from a nun convent and shop at their store sometimes. Now I will never think of them in quite the same way!

lettuce said...

intruiging story
I am loving seeing what people have done with this photo!

Francisca said...

That's powerful, Gabriela. The heart-wrenching choices we must make in life seem manifestly unjust. Freedom means a lot to me too. [Is there an unwanted t in not here: I’m not longer begging...?]

ninotaziz said...

This speaks volumes of sacrifice. What is necessary for a greater cause.

Lovely take.

signed...bkm said...

Great write...there are so many kinds of love...here there is not compromise between the two...nice magpie...bkm

Kirk Jusko said...

Very good. Your short stories seem to reveal that you have a surprisingly more complex view of the world than I would have thought when I first started reading you.

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

This was so well written and so thought provoking.

I often wonder about the lovers and others of those who enter the religious life have left behind.

How did they respond to that break-up?
I'm leaving you for God.
What a discussion that would be!

Rene

ds said...

Beautiful and thought-provoking--thank you so much for this!

Reflections said...

wonderfully written tale, intriguing and thought provoking of complex love and choices.

spacedlaw said...

So sad.

Jingle said...

a sad departure, in a beautiful sense...
very refreshing writing...
Thanks for sharing with Jingle Poetry.

all the best!
xxx

Teresa said...

Torn between two loves is a hard challenge, and a very sad ending for the one not chosen. Very well done.

faery of the wilds said...

freedom instead of lOVE... but at the end everyone wats love... nice poem

kavisionz said...

With love, sometimes comes the pain of separation...and ofcourse, the burden of choices!
Beautifully stated in this poem, Gabriela... It was sad, but lovely!
Thanks for linking it up to Poetry Potluck!!!

fiveloaf said...

love the ending..