Tell me; oh tell me my dear
What I want to hear!
Come, come near
Can you see my tear?
Whispers in my ear
Things I don’t want to hear
Truths I fear
Matters that aren’t clear
Stop, stop… please don’t disappear
I will try to be sincere
So please reappear
and tell me all about yesteryear
Why are you too severe?
I’m not acting weird!
I’m full of revere
And not at all insincere
I know you will persevere
Until I’m convinced there isn’t any frontier
Tell me; oh tell me my dear
What I don’t want to hear!
But don’t jeer
I did hear what I fear
I did clear my tear
You have been sincere
but please disappear…
© Gabriela Abalo
Written for Magpie Tales – #32
31 comments:
You depicted the relationship so well. The yearning and the rejection...
timeless flies search for fries
the final line gave my sense a slap. wow, unexpected twist
very well written and the rhymings r just perfect
Tell me; oh tell me my dear
What I don’t want to hear!
But don’t jeer
Push pull tug release want wont
Well done, Gabi.
Nice write here Gabi... For me hits close to home. Love and Light, Sender
inviting words,
your tale makes one feel calm and embraced.
Brava Gabi-
Dear Gabi,
I so envy you that you have been to Borobodur. I have not been - so close, yet so far. Now that the girls are bigger, perhaps I will be able to steal a few days alone to bask in its splendour.
Loved your closing line.. I so would have felt the same...
Very nice poem... sad yet strong !!
the things we want to hear and don't want to hear - very well written!
Well done Gabi. I invite you and your fellow writers to join the community at:
http://hellopoetry.com/home/
a friendly place to gain exposure and exchange with other poets.
Father time? Or memory? ;)
So like a woman! Plead for understanding and when it arrives, you don't want it!
Mmmm.. I guess you won't want this bit of understanding either so I will go now.
Well done, it is clear!
yes, i do understand this...listen but please disappear...it is good to be a woman...bkm
Sometimes we'd rather the Mirror, Mirror on the wall to lie to us..
Rene
Interesting take on "reveal."
Beautiful poem and the fears of a woman very clear. But alas!! was punished for sincerely revealing in the last stanza.
Længe leve revolutionen!
A fun description of that which we all think/worry about too much; je pense!
rel
Oh what it takes to get to the point where we just want them to disappear. Great job!
I agree, smtimes people do say things that u don't want 2 hear & u do wish they wd just go away.
A humorous twist at the end. Truth hurts. Reality bites. We know we need it but can't wait to get rid of it.
lots of fun, and with some deep thoughts. really well done.
your last line says so much gabi...and i wonder did they think how it ever got to this point...nice magpie!
Reads like something Dorothy Parker might have come up with. Very good.
yes! great magpie!
A stunning job of rhyming!
Brilliant! You had the same "tune" as John Cooper Clarke.... I love it! :)
Very good Magpie!
Gabriela i love what you did with your poem for Magpie...awesome writing! :-)
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