Monday, September 20, 2010
My rune
That distressing night
It wasn’t pretty light
But I still wanted to write
Many verses in spite
Raising my voice like a kite
And with all my might
I wrote my rune
To recite it to the moon
During the month of June
That was coming very soon
And needed to be in tune
With my upsetting afternoon
Looking at the stars
While hearing the guitars
I devoured all my chocolate bars
As if they could cure my scars
A tune to the moon
Written by the lagoon
A chant to the stars
To be played by sitars
A hymn to the night
calling for the light
© Gabriela Abalo
For Poetry Potluck
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A tune to the moon
Written by the lagoon
A chant to the stars
To be played by sitars
A hymn to the night
calling for the light
perfect rhyme,
love the pace and rhythm in it.
how very tickling to have you write a piece especially fitting our theme,
very masterfully done,
everything about moon is so romantic, and you appear an expert in doing the moon poetry.
Thank you Jingle for your continuous support. I wrote this poem, trying to fit the theme, as a sign of appreciation for your kind encouragement.
I'm so glad you liked it!
loveNlight
Gabi
Great poem. I thought the mention of sitars was especially inspiring.
A hymn to the night...indeed.
I really liked this as well.
Just the thought that someone is listening to sitars makes me extremely happy.
A tune to moon while spooning in
CHOCOLATE!!!
- sounds pretty good to me, even if you were having an upsetting afternoon and difficult night.
A tune to the Moon...delightful....bkm
Great moon, great poem and that green lizard at the top and it's miniature moon eye, all wonderful. Thanks Gabriela.
wow! really thematic. nice!
"I wrote my rune
To recite it to the moon"
I love the words, and I love the idea behind them. :)
Holy Macaroni..this was gooooooddd!!!
Totally fell for those rhymes (I am sucker for them, by the way :))
Every stanza was just plain awesome!!!
What an ode to the moon! She must feel very honored to have write for her despite an annoying afternoon! :)
Thank you so much for sharing this sweet and witty poem with us at poetry potluck! This was totally cool!
This poem really conjures up an image. A pleasant read.
What a wonderful use of rhyme, and that's no easy task sometimes. Well done, and a very nice addition to the Potluck :)
PS Your photography is just fantastic! :)
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Happy Tuesday!
Love the rhyming and the images. And how could anything with chocolate not be good?
I love how you write with quick, catchy, rhymes. Very good.
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