Tuesday, October 5, 2010

Deserted


Why am I left alone?
I am feeling abandoned
On my very own
I was in her womb
From her I was born

Where shall I go?
What did I do wrong?
Doesn’t she love me anymore?
Where has she gone?
I don’t want to be alone!

What is going on?
I want to be home
Please don’t be cold
I really need your warmth
Don’t put me on hold

You are the mother
That doesn’t bother
For any other than your lover
Leaving me without cover
On my own to hover
Until you recover
From being a wine lover

I need my mother
I love my mother
I beg you Holy Father
Please give me back my mother



© Gabriela Abalo

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31 comments:

RA said...

So sad but straight to the poit. The image tears my heart apart...

gospelwriter said...

Very sad, poignant. Poor child, it happens far too often - and there are so many ways of abandoning our children.

Desert Rose said...

OMG ..its so heart breaking..the picture, tears flow now..your lines pour with emotions..poignant!

ds said...

Such a photograph, such a poem. Powerful indeed. Thank you.

Kirk Jusko said...

I like how in that last verse you juxtapose "Holy Father" with "mother".

KB said...

Heart breaking

Ben Langhinrchs said...

So sad, and so true. My heart goes out to the young, lost ones just wishing for love and caring.

Monkey Man said...

Those left behind the self indulgent deserve better. Excellent One Shot.

Thanks for stopping by mine.

Brian Miller said...

i see so many children just wishing for someone to love them...i was with two tonight...heartbreak but real piece...great one shot!

moondustwriter said...

Basically an orphan - yet the shell of a mother remains almost to taunt the child.

thanks for sharing with One Shot
we need to remember to reach out to the little ones

Moon Hugs

moondustwriter said...

I am writing a series about children such as this. For now it will be a blog series. Would love to share this poem as part of the series (attributing you a the poet of course)

if you are interested email me moondustwriter@gmail.com

Lu Ann said...

It truly made me cry...
How can they?.... Well you know what I mean.

Though it made me angry and sad it is, as always, beautifully written.

PattiKen said...

This is so sad. I thought at first that this poor child had lost his mother to famine or war. I didn't expect it to be alcohol and sex. But to him, she is just as lost. Well done.

Shashi said...

Very sad and poignant... could feel the pain in those simple words of the child...
Great.
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Emmanuel Ibok said...

Sad picture, sad poem...situations like this should be eradicated from humanity, at least to the bearest minimum.

Cheers.

Nick Rolynd said...

Oh...so sad. And yet, so true...it happens far too often. =(

Beautiful work, by the way.

TALON said...

Awww! This breaks my heart! And it happens far too often...

Claudia said...

deserted kids - can find them all over the world..and it's just so sad..they need their parents so desperately..heart-touching one shot!

Leo said...

a sad theme, and the image is heartbreaking.. your words, clear n crisp, do the cause justice.. the voice of that child is so pleading!

My One Shot Is HERE:
http://leonnyes.wordpress.com/2010/10/05/the-elements/

Eric Alder said...

Yes this is sad, but it also angers me that so many people do this kind of thing.

Don't have children if you don't really want them or can't/won't take care of them.

EG Wow said...

Hoe very sad!

Poetic Shutterbug said...

Abandoned and alone is unfortunately much the case these days. Poignant and powerful words. Well done.

Lovely Annie said...

I am covered in chills...and my heart aches...you honour the lonely and abandoned with your poem!

Amanda said...

This is something so very near to my heart and you had me in tears...thanks for this, we all need to reach out more. Wonderful One Shot my dear friend xxx

Me said...

I can never understand the crimes committed against children...it is so unfathomable to me how people can betray the trust of their babies so horribly.

Your One Shot paints a heartbreaking picture. Well done.
-C

Cindybrown said...

SO sad but so much truth!!

Glynn said...

Moving, and affecting. The heartbreak of too common a story. Thanks for this.

Kristen Haskell said...

Heartbreaking it really makes me consider adoption seriously.

Steve said...

I like most of this poem, it's something that begs to have Richard Attenborough doing a commercial for it.

Constructive crit/suggestion: your next to last stanza ("You are my mother. . .") has too many "-er" line-break words for this reader.

Maybe losing one of two them as line-break words would improve this otherwise solid work.

Obviously, it's your poem, and you'll do what you want with it - no self-respecting poet would do otherwise - and hopefully, you're taking my suggestion in the spirit it's intended: helping you improve a good piece of work (as I see it). :)

faery of the wilds said...

the real pain of a child is beyond words... the feeling of not being accepted by ones own mother... but beautifully put

senderupwords said...

This is a tragic write filled with longing... abandonment is something I deal with daily. Not well I might add. Nice One Shot. Love and Light, Sender