One moment of pride
Unmasked the disgraceful lust
Releasing the auto imposed sloth
Impetus envy and gluttony were the driving force
Unleashing the wrath hidden within
Greedily buried and contained
I became an outcast
A skeptical sinner
Forever to walk on my own
Condemned to eternal damnation
Unless I repent
But I am just a human
Envious of the wind that can flow and be
Proud of who I am
Lusting for freedom
Sloth to follow the rules
Gluttonously enjoying each jiffy
Reacting with rage to the auto impose limits
Avariciously living
I am a human
An unleashed dreamer
Fully living
© Gabriela Abalo
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38 comments:
This is a totally new expression coming from you. Love the wild abandon.
powerful twist! and as humans, we are entitled to feel a hurricane of emotions on daily basis (sometimes by the minute). Gracias Gabi!
hey, no fair using my description in your poetry. I get enough bad press anyway (just kidding). Loved this.
Your writing its beautiful :)
Loved your blog!
A poem truly unleashed. Bravo.
(Did you mean win or wind in stanza 3?)
What a beautiful one Gabriela..!!
There's a smooth flow feel to the words.. well done.. xox
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A great use of language here.
Sounds like you are contemplating the seven deadly sins...Lust, greed, envy, gluttony...yet unleashed in the end.
creative use of words !
I am a human
An unleashed dreamer
Fully living..
love the way you make it.
beautiful ending.
cheers!
Thanks for the support.
Amazing poem. A portrait of a human, so deep and yet so true. In a state of awe through your entire poem, and then the last stanza - held spellbound. Wonderful!
Oh, you wrote of sin so beautifully! And those last three lines are a gorgeous expression of what it is to be human.
I loved the opening verse! Some powerful imagery here.
It's wonderful to feel alive and free! Beautiful words!
It's great - the way you celebrate your humanity. Lovely poem!
Enjoyed yr poem. Certainly got the deadly sins theme in there nicely! Good job
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ah yes we are human with frailities...great poem!
But I am just a human
Envious of the wind that can flow and be
Proud of who I am
Lusting for freedom
Sloth to follow the rules
Gluttonously enjoying each jiffy
Reacting with rage to the auto impose limits
Avariciously living
Seems to me that this is about being alive and that God would be pleased!
Victoria
I've sometimes raved, but more often simply seethed, against auto-imposed limits all my life.
Great poem!
I meant "raged", not "raved".
I think a typo is an auto-imposed limit all its' own
love it how you understand your humanity in this piece --great write on this prompt and bravo on including all of the sins....blessings...bkm
Amazing shift of energy..rules stretched and broken in the name of freedom..It's how we become ourselves!!
Wonderfully written, great use of words and making the reader relate.
Wysteria
i am human, hear me roar...nice...we are all a messy anyway when you really look at it...we can let that beat us up or free us...nice one shot!
Great poem. Loved this:
"I am a human
An unleashed dreamer
Fully living"
The poem pretty sums up our state of nature & torment.
YES! Passion! Amazing poem! Bring on them deadly "sins!"
Love the emphasis in this poem.
You are in charge you are on the quest to dream and live.
Nice One Shot
Just a reminder that we would love you to enter the One Stop Competition (ends oct 22).
Moon Smiles
Amazing imagery you have created here...well done my friend x
Those who condemn with words may not realize their full connotations. You incorporated the deadly sins in such a virtuous context. Well done. Gay @beachanny
A poem within
I am a human
An unleashed dreamer
Fully living
Keep on fully living! Inspiring poem.
I liked it so much...Loved your words, "I am just a human" so apt ... thanks for sharing..
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Love the ending to this!
Great One Shot and I absolutely love the ending. Love and Light, Sender
Nice One Shot, Gabi!
The words "I am human" say it all. We are the only species who really feel guilt, aren't we?
Very nice One Shot.
a great poem...but the ending smashed it..super writing..cheers pete
Love your freedom and and ability to rebel against rules. Unleashed dreamer, lusting for freedom, outcast, skeptical sinner, etc. Love your poem.
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